Monthly Archives: January 2013

Sunday Snippets Critique Blog Hop

Jennifer M Eaton has started a Sunday Snippets Critique Blog Hop in which writers post 250 words of their current Work in Progress and then hop around and critique everyone else’s snippets. To join,  click here to sign up and add your name and web site address to the list. Continue reading

Six Sentence Sunday #28

6 Sentence Sunday LogoGood morning, good reader, on this last official Six Sentence Sunday!

Because this is the final official Six Sunday I thought it fitting that I close with a close. Here are the last six sentences of the current chapter in my online serial novel Rochelle’s Briefcase, a modern day mystery/thriller/young adult/whatever-it-turns-out-to-be story.

This is the same scene as last week where Rochelle is in the police station being questioned about the report of her missing neighbour the previous day. As Rochelle feared during the entire interview, the police officer finally asks the dreaded question.

He paused to look down at the briefcase Rochelle had with her. “Activities that make this person very uncomfortable.” His eyes locked on hers. Rochelle was wide-eyed and frozen.
Tell me, Ms. Summers. What is in that briefcase?”

You can read the lead-up to these closing lines, by clicking here. Don’t forget to vote! You can also try this link to read the previous chapters.

To catch up on my previous Six Sunday posts, Click Here.

Check out more great Six Sentence Sunday authors and their amazing contributions at http://www.sixsunday.com/ before the site closes. I’m not sure about plans for the website itself.

I’d like to thank Sara Brookes and the team at Six Sentence Sunday for their tireless dedication to this fantastic site. I’ve met some great people on here and it will be sad to see this end. But I will continue to follow and read and learn. Until next Sunday…

Six Sentence Sunday #27

6 Sentence Sunday LogoGood morning!

With only one more Sunday on which to share six sentences, I thought I’d pop out something different. This time I’m presenting six from the current chapter in my online serial novel Rochelle’s Briefcase, a modern day mystery/thriller/young adult/whatever-it-turns-out-to-be story. In this scene Rochelle is in the police station about to be questioned about the report of her missing neighbour the previous day. As instructed by some unknown but influential people, she has the briefcase with her.

The briefcase was again the elephant in the room and Rochelle was acutely aware that the policeman was dying to ask about it but perhaps couldn’t find a reason to justify the question. Instead he got straight to the point.
“Okay, so yesterday afternoon, you and your friend… Tina Cadelano, reported your neighbour, Ruby, missing, correct?”
“That’s right.”
“And you believed she was kidnapped but refused to provide information on why you believed this to be true?”
Rochelle hesitated while holding his gaze.

You can read the rest of the chapter, by clicking here. Don’t forget to vote! You can also try this link to read the previous chapters.

To catch up on my previous Six Sunday posts, Click Here.

Check out more great Six Sentence Sunday authors and their amazing contributions at http://www.sixsunday.com/.

Rochelle’s Briefcase, Chapter 9 – A Scrivener Experiment

Greetings everyone!

I think one or two of you might actually be following my serial novel, “Rochelle’s Briefcase” so I’ll just mention that Chapter 9 is up. Voters who read chapter 8 (or skipped straight to the poll) decided that the car parked outside Rochelle’s place was a police car and not the well-known blue hatchback, not the ominous black car with tinted windows, and not Tina’s car. Continue reading

Six Sentence Sunday #26

6 Sentence Sunday LogoGood morning! It’s now the 2nd Sunday of 2013 and I finally remembered that NaNo was last year.

Here is yet another 6 from my NaNoWriMo novel from 2012, The Rogue, wholly raw and unedited. Another random scene in which I introduce Abby’s reckless young sister. Remember Abby? She’s married to the astronomer who discovers the Rogue.

Judy was 25 when when first heard about the Rogue. And it wasn’t via Abby. Everyone knows a geek or a conspiracy theorist and if they don’t, they’re not too far down the chain of acquaintances. Word does spread quickly especially if it’s potentially bad news. She didn’t tell anyone but she felt vindicated in her belief of being here for a good time and not a long time. She felt that her time partying with the devil and his friends was well justified.

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Six Sentence Sunday #25

6 Sentence Sunday LogoGood morning!

Here is yet another 6 from my NaNoWriMo novel from this year, The Rogue, wholly raw and unedited. This is a new scene not yet featured on 6SS and as I read it back I realise it’s a good example of the bad practice of changing POV within a paragraph in a 3rd person narrative. I remember starting this with the intention of writing from Travis’s point of view and it quickly changed to that of the already seated passenger. Hmm. Work is needed. See what you think.

 

Travis boarded the train with his pals and the six of them immediately took over a booth area of the train where a man was already sitting against the window. The boys were so loud other passengers immediately felt uncomfortable in their presence. The man beside the window ignored them and continued gazing out the window at whatever could prevent him making eye contact with the obnoxious louts who had just invaded his personal space. He wasn’t dressed up today. In fact he was incognito, doing an exercise to prove a point. He wanted to travel the city’s public transport system as a relatively poor man, a sharp contrast to his true lifestyle..

 

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