Jennifer M Eaton has started a Sunday Snippets Critique Blog Hop in which writers post 250 words of their current Work in Progress and then hop around and critique everyone else’s snippets. To join, click here to sign up and add your name and web site address to the list.
This first week will feature the first 250 words of the works, so here is my opening 250 from my novel Rani’s Right. It’s a young adult, contemporary novel. Some of this was actually featured on the first couple of Six Sentence Sunday’s early in 2012, hopefully this snippet provides a little more continuity.
It’s not the first of January. It’s not January. It’s not even June when this nightmare started. But it’s the first chance I’ve had to put all this down on paper. Or more to the point, get it out of my system. I don’t really care where it goes: diary, notebook, tape, video, Dictaphone, someone’s eardrum or the cool spring time breeze. I don’t care.
Anywhere, just out of my head. Part of the reason I want to do this is to record what happened so I may as well be honest about it. I tried talking to Rani soon after the accident mainly because I was going back to Melbourne and she was still in a coma but I made a mess of that. I said everything I shouldn’t have and nothing that needed saying. Well, nearly nothing.
Am I being honest with myself yet? I don’t know. I’ve tried talking to my video camera but it just stared at me. Didn’t offer sympathy. Didn’t give me any advice, didn’t convince me everything was going to be OK.
Then again neither did this diary when I started writing on the page of June 21. Maybe that’s why I grabbed a handful of pages and ripped them out and tossed them into the air like autumn leaves in a park, but with frustration instead of cheer. Or because what I did manage to write was about as legible as sandblasted Egyptian hieroglyphics. Perhaps it was because my hands weren’t physically ready to write.
A word of warning about the critiquing process. Being on the east coast of Australia, my Sunday is between 16 and 21 hours (New York to Hawaii) ahead of the USA so I might not get around to critiquing your snippets until my Monday evening or even later in the week.
Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to read my opening lines and if you’re taking part in the Critique Blog Hop, I look forward to reading your constructive criticism. 🙂
Just jumping in before anyone else does on this point: I just un-hid the comments in my document (it’s been a while!) and found a massive “Hmmm” beside the line about the sandblasted Egyptian hieroglyphics. As I copied this block in for this post the Hmm I felt this time around must have triggered deja vu for a good reason!